Final Cut.

Here is my final cut, after the feedback I have received, I took into account to bring back the bike idea, as it was something to add in so there were lots of different clips going off and the audience didn't get bored. I also added in the shoe Idea, I think it worked really well, and again kept the audience interested. Some people mentioned about when the main singer says "oh, oh" at the start but I quite liked that idea, and I think it was edited properly, so it worked, it was also a bit different and quirky as it jumped. This cut is quite similar then my second draft, although some things have been taken out and added in. I've shortened the narrative by putting the shoe's inbetween. I noticed, when my audience was watching my first draft they got distracted and would not really be watching it, whereas when they watched this cut, they seem alot more interested, as there was a lot more going off. I am really happy with my final cut, although it wasn't my original desire to film what I've filmed but I think this idea is alot better and it relates to the lyric, which my first idea didn't. 

Shoe Idea?

(Picture of White shoes)

The friend that gave me the idea for the band, watched my music video and suggested with the lyric's being about shoes, why not include shoes. The lyric's start with "Bye bye, my white shoes." later on in the lyric's, it says, "Bye, bye my black shoes." So I got a pair of girls, white plimsolls and some dark boy's Fred Perry shoes, and took lots of photos to make it look like I've used stop motion. I tried this for an experiment and if I didn't think it worked I was going to leave it out. I felt like it did work and as I showed people the finish idea, they really liked it, and thought it went perfectly with the lyrics. Shooting the shoes also allowed me to represent the relationship between the narrative of boy and the girl, together then not together. I first did displayed the shoes in colour but after a bit of feedback, it was evident that people thought it would look better in black and white. 

                                                                        (Picture of Black shoes)

Rough cut 2 Audience feedback.

• Some of the shots are too long, it get's a bit boring.
• The range of shots work well.
• The shot where the girl and boy are on the sofa and they move along it, is really good.
• The shot's need to change due to the change in music. 
• I think the opening's really strong with the different instruments. 
• I'm not too sure about the bit at the start where the main singer says "oh, oh" 

- Declan Prendagast. 

• The new location is alot better, it buts up the music video abit.
• I like the flash back on the girl, when she turns to look at the camera.
• The narrative works well.
• The sped up shots at the bus station works really well, cut inbetween the band playing, it doesn't get boring.
• The shot where the girl is going through the door, it isn't quite matched up quite right.
• Some shots, the boy is looking at the camera and doesn't look right. 
• The lip syncing is alot better. 
• I liked the bike idea, there was just too much of it. I would like to see the bike come back in. 

- Sonal Mistry.

• The start is good with the instruments, but the shots but the location needs to change quicker.
• When the lead singer was on the bike that worked well, only some of the shots lip syncing was not right but I think this idea was good.
• When the boy and girl move up the sofa that's a good technique. 
• The lip syncing is alot better here.
• When there is a flashback of the girl looking back, I dont understand why the filter has changed. 
• The narrative works well. 
• When the singer is at the bus station again another really good shot. 
• I like the hand held camera when the girl is walking away, it's as if we are the eye's of what the guy is seeing, which makes it feel personal. 

- Sam Davies. 

Rough Cut 2

After the feedback from my first draft, most people were agreeing that I need to film in a different location. They liked how it was filmed outside, but a change of scene would make it more engaging. They also mentioned that there needs to be some sort of narrative that links with the lyric's, so after looking through my analysed lyric's it was evident that the song was about a boy and a girl, and her leaving. So I came up with the idea of having a boy and girl spending time together, then she breaks up with him and leaves. 

My next thing was the location, where was I going to film it? With the indie rock genre in mind I decided a rough, grungy looking pub would look good, as it would be typical of an indie to hang out, doing open mic nights and generally going places like that to socialise. I wanted to get this filming done quick, so I planned to have only one hour to do the pub scene in. It didn't take long to film and it was alot easier as there were no instruments to carry. 

After filming me went to Victoria Bus station, to catch my bus and then an idea came into my head, of filming Reece (The main singer) in the bus station sat by himself, and fastforward the footage creating from inspiration off Ed Sheeran's A-Team, where the girl is stood in the same potion and the traffic is moving faster. I wanted to do this with Reece but have him sat at the bus stop with the people rushing past him. This was a really quick idea, and didn't know if it was going to work, but it was a success and I think it looks really effective in my music video. 

With the footage of the narrative, I decided to take out all the footage of Reece riding his bike, and replace it with the narrative.

New Location.

After gathering feedback off some people they mentioned about having a different location so I chose to go to a pub and film some sort of narrative to fit with my lyric's. My plan here was to film a girl and a boy in a relationship, there happy, and then they break up.